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从未止步

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发表时间:2020-10-16 15:05网址:http://zw56789.com

人类文明的征途是星展大海,为此我们应同心协力,生生不息,直到踏上宇宙最后的边塞。--题记


遥远的东方,狂风卷积着巨大的积雨云,夹着骇人的闪电和轰鸣的雷声席卷而来。十万年前的东非,雨季如期而至。庞大的积雨云缓慢地移动着,带着一股不可挡的气势。它实在是太过巨大了,以至于单凭人类的肉眼根本无法看到其边际。


居住在此地为数不多的智人,此时都集中在一处山洞中。


天色渐暗,伴随着阵阵雷鸣,雨滴投人了大地的怀抱。突然,一道从天而降的闪电击中了洞外不远处的一棵金合欢树。那棵被闪电击中的金合欢树在顷刻之间燃起了烈火,尽管瓢泼大雨拍击着树干,但火焰仍在树冠间猛烈地燃烧着。


雨,终于停了。洞外的金合欢树上仍蹿动着几朵火花。


一个智人看着洞外的火苗思考了片刻,就向那棵金合欢树走去。他将那些火苗引进洞内,湿漉漉的身体瞬间便被火苗温暖,他的灵魂也被点亮了。


人类踏出了征服自然的步伐。


“你还可以选择放弃。”


看着御座上的国王,觐见君主的这位冒险家摇了摇头。


“我说到做到,我一定会将新世界的宝藏献给陛下。”


麦哲伦向他的国王深深地鞠了一躬,就义无反顾地离开了大殿。


他向码头走去,码头上早已站满了欢送的人群。麦哲伦抬头望向无边无际的大洋,心中感叹不已,但他没有退缩。因为,此时此刻停泊在码头的五艘巨大远洋帆船展示出一种征服一切的力量。麦哲伦向群众致意,踏着无比坚定的步伐,登上了旗舰。


人类踏出了征服地球的步伐。


“阿波罗十一号”登陆舱开始晃动。


“登陆即将开始,祝你们好运!”


地面指挥中心内,全球电视屏幕前,数亿人等待着他们的消息。


登陆舱平稳地落在了月球上。阿姆斯特朗向同伴示意后,走向舱门。


舱门开启,月球出现在阿姆斯特朗的面前。


阿姆斯特朗沿着扶梯向下移动,在踏上月球表面的那一刻,他说:


“这只是我个人的一小步,却是整个人类的一大步。”


与此同时,全人类沸腾了。


人类,终于踏出了征服星辰大海的步伐!


人类,从未止步。


1.独辟蹊径巧构思。写文章,我们历来提倡切入角度要小。这位考生却反其道而行,写十万年前东非智人在雷雨之后从野外取火,踏出了征服自然的步伐;写葡萄牙航海探险家麦哲伦登上了旗舰,踏出了征服地球的步伐;写美国宇航员阿姆斯特朗登上月球,踏出了征服星辰大海的步伐。本文可以说是大气磅礴,豪情万丈。


2.主旨突出又鲜明。文章上来用题记强调“生生不息”,之后在三个部分的结尾段依次写道“人类踏出了征服自然的步伐”“人类踏出了征服地球的步伐”“人类,终于踏出了征服星辰大海的步伐”,始终紧扣“从未止步”行文。文章结尾是“人类,从未止步”,是对三个部分的总结,也是点题,主旨突出。


3.精选细节巧描绘。为了让阅卷老师过目不忘,考生在第一、第二、第三部分各精心选择一个细节来进行描写。在描绘时,或将重点放在自然环境的描写上,或将重点放在人物语言描写上,且每个部分的末尾都有一句总结语,画龙点睛,高度精练。


参考翻译:

The journey of human civilization is the DBS Ocean. For this, we should work together and live endlessly until we step on the last frontier of the universe. --Inscription


In the far east, huge cumulonimbus clouds were engulfed by squally winds, swept across with terrifying lightning and roaring thunder. In East Africa 100,000 years ago, the rainy season arrived as scheduled. The huge cumulonimbus cloud moved slowly, with an unstoppable momentum. It is so huge that it is impossible to see its margins with human eyes alone.


The few Homo sapiens living here are all concentrated in a cave at this time.


The sky was getting dark, and with the thunder, raindrops fell into the embrace of the earth. Suddenly, a lightning bolt from the sky hit an acacia tree not far from the cave. The acacia tree struck by lightning ignited in an instant. Although the pouring rain hit the trunk, the flame was still burning violently in the canopy.


The rain finally stopped. There were still a few sparks on the acacia tree outside the cave.


A Homo sapiens looked at the flames outside the cave and thought for a moment, then walked to the acacia tree. He introduced those flames into the cave, and his wet body was instantly warmed by the flames, and his soul was also lit up.


Humans have taken the steps to conquer nature.


"You can also choose to give up."


Looking at the king on the throne, the adventurer who saw the king shook his head.


"I will do what I say, and I will dedicate the treasures of the new world to your majesty."


Magellan bowed deeply to his king and left the hall without hesitation.


He walked to the dock, which was already full of farewell crowds. Magellan raised his head to look at the boundless ocean, sighing in his heart, but he did not flinch. Because, at this moment, the five huge ocean-going sailboats moored at the dock show a power to conquer everything. Magellan paid tribute to the masses, and stepped on an extremely firm step to board the flagship.


Humans have taken the steps to conquer the earth.


The landing module of Apollo 11 began to shake.


"The landing is about to begin, good luck to you!"


In the ground command center, hundreds of millions of people are waiting for their news in front of global TV screens.


The landing module landed smoothly on the moon. Armstrong signaled to his companion and walked to the hatch.


The hatch opened and the moon appeared in front of Armstrong.


Armstrong moved down the escalator. At the moment he stepped on the surface of the moon, he said:


"This is just a small step for me, but a big step for the entire human race."


At the same time, all mankind is boiling.


Human beings have finally taken the steps to conquer the sea of stars!


Humanity never stops.


1. Ingenious ideas. When writing articles, we have always advocated a small angle of entry. The examinee went the other way, writing that Homo sapiens in East Africa took fire from the wild after a thunderstorm 100,000 years ago, and took the steps to conquer nature; wrote that the Portuguese sailing explorer Magellan boarded the flagship and stepped out to conquer the earth The pace; writing American astronaut Armstrong landed on the moon and set out to conquer the sea of stars. This article can be said to be magnificent and full of pride.


2. The theme is prominent and clear. The article used the inscription to emphasize "the endless life", and then wrote in the last paragraph of the three parts that "humans have taken the steps to conquer nature", "humans have taken the steps of conquering the earth", and "humans have finally stepped out of conquest". "The steps of the stars and the sea" has always been closely tied to the prose of "never stop". The end of the article is "Humanity, Never Stops", it is a summary of the three parts, but also a topic, with a prominent theme.


3. Featured details and clever depiction. In order to make the marking teacher not forget, examinees carefully select a detail to describe in the first, second, and third parts. When depicting, either focus on the description of the natural environment, or focus on the language description of the characters, and there is a summary sentence at the end of each part, which is the finishing touch and highly refined


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